Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both view and give your own opinion?
Some proponents have a notion that the most effective way of utilizing kids free time is to make them participate in team activities, whereas some prodigies argue that it is essential for them to understand on how to keep themselves busy. However, it is a controversial topic introducing massive debates. In my opinion, the overall personality development yields more significant results when pupils are given the exposure of both sides. This essay will shed light on both facets before conjecturing.
One of the preponderant reasons to support the theory of group activities is that it builds social etiquettes in pupils when they interact with other kids. Furthermore, it refines their communication skills, flourishes mental abilities, and improves their decision-making skills which they would sparingly get in staying alone. It could be best exemplified by a recent survey conducted by Harvard University which revealed that the intelligent quotient in youngsters rises exponentially if they frequently interact with their peer groups and adults.
On the other hand, people advocating the concept of playing alone believe that it boosts their creativity because when they get bored they device innovative ways to keep themselves occupied. Moreover, it channelizes their energy in the right direction as they get isolated from disturbance and distraction caused when too many people work together. For example, an experiment conceived by Dr. Smith involved an individual and a group to perform the same task separately and found that the single person concluded the job quicker than the group because he had no one to contradict or obstruct his actions.
Overall, both approaches affirm disparate advantages and limitations. For an all-round development of a kid, it is essential for him/her to have an exposure of both sides, so that they can quickly reap the benefits from both practices.
Comments
I structured my complete
I structured my complete essay to increase coherence and cohesion, still it says I lack? I am not sure if this tool is able to understand it or not? Can anyone review and suggest where this essay lacks to get to 8 out of 9.
Those warning messages mean
Those warning messages mean that the coherence and cohesion is 'too much', not 'lack':
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333840087655 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220584564889 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
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instead you may pay attention to this warning message:
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
I see a lot of sentence starting with 'it', 'they', 'he'.
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It is a good essay. It deserves 8.0 out of 9 I think.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, whereas, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41077441077 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00014548427 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646464646465 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8958574859 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.916666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179158688042 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566156410126 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333840087655 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976290691256 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220584564889 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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