Both The Poor And The Rich Find Accessibility Into University Difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Both The Poor And The Rich Find Accessibility Into University Difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that both wealthy and non-privileged students face challenges in getting admission to universities. This essay disagrees with the statement because rich families can avail benefits of paid seats, whereas poor youngsters have to rely on their competencies. The following paragraphs of this essay will shed more light on these points.

Children from wealthy backgrounds do not need to worry about getting admission to colleges. This is because many universities have dedicated management seats, which are kept reserved for people who can pay affluent fees to get admission. It does not matter whether they have good marks or not, they can get admission to any course they wish if they are willing to pay the said amount. To illustrate, as per the recent survey published in times magazine, it was found that a substantial 80% of children belonging to rich families study in colleges on paid admission seats.

On the other hand, students from non-privileged backgrounds have to rely on scholarships to get admission to universities. If they are not able to secure outstanding marks in entrance examinations, they would not be able to qualify for the scholarship. In case of failure, they either have to wait for a year to reappear for the scholarship exam or drop the idea of taking admission to the university. Despite having outstanding grades in schools, many fail to follow their dream of further studies due to the lack of money. Statistics reveal that, out of all children who drop out of higher studies, a significant 85% belong to the poor class.

To recapitulate, life is easy for wealthy families, their willingness and potential to pay hefty fees opens a broad range of options to get admission to university on paid seats, whereas poor students compete against an extremely small fraction of seats, and admissions to which are possible through scholarships only, due to this most of them remain deprived of higher education.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13395638629 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91683958161 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557632398754 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.8668229205 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.769230769 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61538461538 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0717317735964 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.026488151948 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305283539342 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0498690613231 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290643521659 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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