You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter- Give details of your study plans- Explain why

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

- Give details of your study plans

- Explain why you want to get a part-time job

- Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Andrew,

Hope you are doing great. I need your help to find a part-time job in your country.

I'm travelling to Canada next month to pursue higher education in computer science and technology stream. It's a two-year degree programme sponsored by Alberta University to selected candidates.

The institute has offered to finance 50% of the course fee, but the rest is still a problem for me. I'm considering to work in the evenings to save money for my remaining academics fees. It will be a great relief for my family as they will be able to spend money on my younger brother's higher education.

Can you ask your uncle who owns multiple stores in Calgary if they need any store attendant? You mentioned that he is very generous, so I hope he may be able to extend his help. Otherwise, I'll have to struggle hard to find a job along with my studies.

Do write to me as you hear back from him. I'll wait for your reply and look forward to cherishing new moments with you again.

Best regards,

Tom

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...d a part-time job in your country. Im travelling to Canada next month to purs...
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Line 9, column 106, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...computer science and technology stream. Its a two-year degree programme sponsored b...
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Line 13, column 101, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...but the rest is still a problem for me. Im considering to work in the evenings to ...
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Line 17, column 190, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... be able to extend his help. Otherwise, Ill have to struggle hard to find a job alo...
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Line 17, column 194, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Ill) must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...able to extend his help. Otherwise, Ill have to struggle hard to find a job along wi...
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Line 21, column 43, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
... write to me as you hear back from him. Ill wait for your reply and look forward to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64285714286 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47911211128 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.703296703297 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.8918500225 44.8134815571 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.0 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236966548812 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782266651871 0.0766984524023 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075584162271 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145148531685 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116647553701 0.0580467560999 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.04 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.