Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Upbringing of children is always a debatable issue among majority of parents. While some people believes that both mother and father should teach their young ones to find how they can make themselves busy on their own , I believes that parents should foster their adolescents to take part in arranged group activities to develop their social skills .
On the one hand, host of parents demand their young ones need to be a member of high valued social club because they firmly believe that such type of places create some important skills such as team work and sympathy for other people. Since they had earned such skills in their childhood, they give respect and talk politely to the senior person of society and their home. In addition to that such skills help them to be a successful professional person in future, also. For example, a recent Times survey reveals that the forty percent of children who are successful in their life, had earned such qualities from their childhood. Apart from that one can also adopt the same as their primary earning source also by arranging a classes.
On the other hand, Many elders believe that adults should decide how they can spend their leisure time because they strongly believes they want to make their children self-dependent. Although they know their kids makes mistakes sometimes, they simply ignored that and motivate them to do on their own again and again, so that one day can learn from their own mistakes. For instance, In The British countries , It is a normal trend to send their children in to hostels from their primary schools to make them self-responsible and self-decision maker.
In conclusion, having considered both the views, I think an organised group activity is more beneficial for children. Children are the future of society and their nurturing cannot be ignored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, apart from, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99348534202 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49767633948 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557003257329 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6994207119 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.75 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386205199178 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148193801148 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873196359024 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263491423947 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664466278237 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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