Some people say that parents should encourage thier children to take part in orgainised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the 21st century, parents are involved in their own life so much that they don't have sufficient time to help their kids. It is believed that a few patrons motivate their children to participate in group activities in their leisure time. However, some people want their kids to learn different ways to keep them busy. In my opinion, I think it is always better to young minds to enroll in the group activities to make themselves competent in soft skills. This essay will discuss both the views in the following paragraphs.
When a child participates in a group of people it makes him nervous at first but when he starts talking to the other children and enhance his confidence to face new people. The group activities allow children to learn co-operation and how to share their things like pen, book, etc, with others which increase the chances of inculcating the leadership qualities at an early stage of life. It is surveyed by "NewYork Times" that children as young as 4 years who participate in group activities at schools are likely to succeed in their professional career.
Despite being in group activities, it is crucial for the youngsters to know about self-training for their personal goals like their interests in courses, hobbies, sports, and etc. By doing self-assessment they can make their own schedule and they will learn what are the things it is necessary to study which will help them to achieve their goals. Furthermore, children, who are interested in playing soccer or cricket will make their time more productive by including such activities on a daily basis. For example, it is seen that children who learn things on their own to keep them busy don't share emotions and feeling at ease.
To conclude, it is a must for children to participate in group activities to impart soft skills qualities in them at a young age. However, being teaching themselves to occupy with work will make them introvert and make them less socially active.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90447761194 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72206072921 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534328358209 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8765707734 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.357142857 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335608155457 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125567691633 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478516846449 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208663666104 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742698281567 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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