Some people say a person’s success in adult life is the result of the way they brought up as a child by their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is said that success in mature life is the outcome of fostering of a child by their parents. I completely disagree with this statement. To become successful in life, talent and hard work is important, not the facilities offered by parents in young age.
Without talent, is it possible to achieve a target in life? No. For example, Bill Gates has talent, so he has become a successful entrepreneur. In his childhood, he had not receive much help from his parents, but he got early age success. In addition, John Milton, an English poet, who was an orphan and from a poor family, yet he became a remarkable poet in English literature. So, merit is an important element to triumph something in life.
Not only to become successful in mature age, but also to get it in teenage, there is no alternative to hard work. Mark Zuckerburg, the owner of facebook, is a good example of this. Before him many people have just given idea about this social media platform, but Mark has launched it for the world with his long time effort and become successful. Though his parents wanted him to get involved him in their family business, Mark was not interested at all. Overall, if the target is correct, then it is not impossible to achieve that and childhood fostering or parents role is very limited in this case.
In conclusion, ability and great effort is the result of a person’s success. In my opinion, Parent functions only as a guide for a successful man. Early age facilities have little effect regarding achievements of a winner. Hunger for success always leads a man to his victory.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: received
...repreneur. In his childhood, he had not receive much help from his parents, but he got ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ess always leads a man to his victory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7311827957 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70491322277 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587813620072 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.742768032 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6470588235 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138208592006 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503883144336 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598685380682 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980444496831 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593217917902 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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