Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some individuals pointed to the government for the rising obesity among teenagers, whilst others considered the parents to be faulty. In my opinion, both administration and parents are responsible because of their improper vigil on food production and eating habits of children respectively. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons to support the given viewpoints.
People allegate the government for increasing obesity in children due to its laxity in regulation on food production. In other words, the over-production of fast-food eateries has been increased the food adulteration, where food is laced with harmful preservatives. Even though there are taxes on these products, their quality becomes deteriorated, which thereby impact on the health of children and make them obese. The recent article of The Guardian revealed the black truth of chips and candies making industries of Finland, where a high ratio of carbohydrates and chemicals were used to make these items as compared to their food labels. This happened due to the inappropriate checking of food chains by the food ministry.
On the other hand, however, parents are accountable for the overweight of their child as they sometimes overlook the eating habits of them. Most of the parents, nowadays, are job-oriented and spend their considerable time in office, which has impacted negatively on their children. To be more specific, they could not guide their offspring properly, about unhealthy eating and its repercussions. According to the World Health Organization, the chances of obesity are more and obvious among those youngsters, who are not under the supervision of their parents, to provide proper guidance. Hence, improper parenting also triggers the chances of obesity.
In conclusion, both administration and parents are equally questionable for the high rise in obesity among children. It is categorically mentioned that the ministry is not vigilant towards the poor productions of food products and the parents also not advising their wards properly about the dire consequences of fast food and its continuous consumption.
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Suggestion:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50578034682 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09114146146 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549132947977 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7518381992 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0625 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191164439752 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729286603627 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796270005664 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134206799536 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792528690574 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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