Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement
It is argued that elder people should regardless of occupation is unfair, and they sure that such people should have a pension at earlier age. I agree with this statement; This essay shows why old people should leave the work at an earlier age, and shows some types of workers whom they should take advantages from early retirement.
It a fact that elders people who reach age 50 and still work, Not only do they become week but also they lose some of their concentration during the work. In addition to that, they are suffering from some diseases related to this age. Moreover, their efficiency becomes less than before. For example, In 2017, a research has been published from the World Health Organization showed that the efficiency of the workers decreases by 50% after they became 50 years old.
Despite, there are some jobs are important in our life; however, they are dangers for health. such as the workers whom are working in welding field. They are working most time on unhealthy invironment; therefore, if they worked for a long time in the same role, they would suffer from some illness. For Instance, an article has been Published by the New York Times showed that the workers are working on welding steel structure at steel factory they should not spend 10 years continue work at asme job, Otherwise they will have some kind of diseases such as Cancer.Moreover, the chance to catch diseases increasing after they became elder than 50 years old.
In conclusion, I believe that old pepole have to retire and take a pension at an earlier age, and this age should be on 50 years not more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75357142857 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40891202472 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532142857143 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.4045097945 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359324536977 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145326960616 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859765304573 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244353153068 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561059958399 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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