Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of wo

An age to retire, has always had been in debate for many years. Many citizen thinks that, it is not fair for people to work till they enter the age of senior citizen, whereas few thinks that people who keep working, are physically and mentally more healthy. I agree that, it should be decided on the type of employment of a person. In this essay, we will discuss both the view points.

First lets talk about the people who wants to work past their retirement age. Not everybody is ready to sit at home and do nothing. Some people who are physically fit wants to keep up with their jobs and wants to contribute to the nations economy as well as wants to support themselves. When doing nothing, affects an individuals mental health. A research at St. John's university said that elders who are active has decreased chance to form dementia, which is highly seen in elderly people.

On the contrary, people with jobs that demands a lot of multi-tasking and physical strength, should be given an early retirement, to avoid any physical problems during their old age. For example, people working in stores, have to keep standing for whole day, which might cause a problem in knee in long run. So Early retirement should be given to the employees based on the kind of occupation they are in.

Early retirement will help people having jobs that asks for a lot of physical work such as store manager, coal miners, drivers. And another type of employees are those where precision in judgement is needed, such as Trauma practitioner, traffic controller.

In strongly agree that, retiring early should be purely based on the type of work. Although, a set age for retirement is important, however, in some occupation it can be narrowed down accordingly.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun citizen seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many citizens'.
Suggestion: Many citizens
...ways had been in debate for many years. Many citizen thinks that, it is not fair for people ...
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Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...eir jobs and wants to contribute to the nations economy as well as wants to support the...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...themselves. When doing nothing, affects an individuals mental health. A research at St. Johns ...
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Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
..., affects an individuals mental health. A research at St. Johns university said that elder...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, so, well, whereas, for example, kind of, such as, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78217821782 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52760898826 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0127822343 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5625 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263954021742 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842882714966 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472989833673 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147982952373 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371850246382 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.