Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is agreed that having the same retirement age for everyone, without taking into consideration their profession, is unacceptable. This is because some workers should be allowed to quite their jobs earlier and get a pension. In my opinion, not all workers have the same health conditions and job difficulties. As a result, I strongly recommend for an earlier retirement some workers. In this essay, I will discuss the types of workers that should recieve that benefit.
Scientific studies show that workers with certain health issues have lower productivity compared to healthy workers. In addition, employement of diseased worker has serious ramifications for the employer and the worker himself. However, The number of diseased workers is exceeding two millions in our country. For example, 10% of the workers in my company are suffering complicated diseases. As a result the profits this year have greatly declined.
Generally speaking, not all the jobs are equal in the work difficulties. consequently, worker that perform difficult job should retire earlier. For instance, workers in the construction field usually carry heave items which affect their backbone and could really lead to health hazards. For that reason, employers should offer them an earlier retirement if they are in need of it.
In conclusion, goverment should regulate the rules associated with the retirement age as this could affect the society as a whole.In addition, patients should be treated differently and offered an earlier retirement as they should be given the priority.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, really, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45491803279 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88068986408 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569672131148 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.238223726 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7333333333 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2666666667 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27595672779 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946575192814 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577147067974 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168541654762 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048864149801 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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