Some people think that hobbies should be linked with technology, while others believe that it is not necessary for hobbies to be involved with technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.
Technology has an unprecedented presence in people’s daily life. This essay thus first aims to investigate wherein some people believe relating hobbies and technology is essential; thereafter, it examines why others think the contrariwise, followed by my opinion regarding this matter.
One reason that some millennials believe necessitates a linkage between hobbies and technology can be illustrated as the latter’s practicality. These days, almost everything is done by using computers and gadgets and thereby if the masses use them more often, especially during their leisure time as a hobby, their tech knowledge will be elevated, allowing them to increase their computer proficiency, which in turn helps them to accomplish day-to-day tasks faster and more conveniently. Statistics within a study done by the Yale University in 2017, for example, showed that 88 percent of people who frequently use their computer or smartphone for entertainment is able to finish tasks much faster than others. However, another notion begs the differ.
Another angle on this debate suggests hobbies should not necessarily involve technology because there are other important skills that are vital to life. People need skills such as social competency that cannot be gained through technology and therefore they should invest their time to interact with others via face-to-face conversation whereby they can develop their inter-personal abilities. A psychology article by John Abbey, an accomplished psychologist, for instance, showed that an overwhelming majority of individuals who spend most of their free time around technological gadgets find it difficult to befriend with their colleagues. This demonstrates that investing too much time on modern gadgets endangers people’s social life.
All in all, even though using technology on a regular basis is helpful to increase one’s computer literacy, I tend to agree with those who think there are other vital skills in life that cannot be acquired through this method and thus hobbies should not only revolve around technology.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67515923567 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02147908742 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617834394904 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.1467123753 49.4020404114 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.0 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20252087926 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076063173413 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531871908537 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126897332433 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019457138589 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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