Some people think that THE MAIN PURPOSE of SCHOOL is to turn children to good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is an undeniable fact that school education plays a significant role in establishing a child's bright career and character. While some people assert that the primary aim of this should be transforming students to responsible citizens and dedicated workers instead of focusing individual's talent and behaviour, I completely disagree with this notion.
To begin with, there are a number of reasons to support my view that concentrating on unique talents and characters of different students is quintessential. First and foremost is that monitoring and understanding the individuality of every child help to discover their personality, which, in turn, transform them into responsible citizens. This is because each child is blessed with a varied behaviour some can be short-tempered and some patient, some conserved and some friendly, therefore, it is necessary to look after every trait and educate them accordingly in order to make them capable to deal with the society. For instance, in the USA, students in Kindergarten are assigned with teachers according to their behavioural aspect in order to understand them completely and to help them to become a mature person.
Secondly, my opinion is further bolstered by the factor that a focus on an individual's skill and talent is essential to provide them with a bright career. The reason for this is opting a profession of one's own interest usually lead to success and satisfaction as complete dedication and passion are generally involved in this. For example, with reference to the statistics of 'The Time', 70% of the successful people in the world are the ones who followed their innate talents. In contrast, if the purpose of teaching will only involve turning students to qualified doctors, engineers and bankers, then their inner skills will gradually vanish.
In conclusion, although academic education aims at nurturing the child with good manners and moulding them to skilled professional, in my perspective, focusing on the characters and skills of every student not only help to discover their unique personality but also tread their paths to successful careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...stered by the factor that a focus on an individuals skill and talent is essential to provid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with, with reference to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37202380952 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02657353988 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568452380952 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8501133773 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.090909091 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5454545455 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.8181818182 7.06120827912 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109384895099 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413955130997 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300902213533 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067564873188 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264281425619 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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