Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers Others disagree Discuss both views and give your opinion

One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in a number of people believing that cash is most suitable present for youngers while others oppose it by saying that other things should be given them on the place of money. I strongly agree with former view of giving furtune to young ones. This easy would discuss both sides in following paragraphs.
To commence with, there are deluge of agreements in favour of my stance. The most preponderant one is that cash is best option to give children as a gift because of their different likings due to this adults could not decide what they will like. It can not only contribute to manage their needs, but also lead to numerous other benefits in various fields. Thanks to wide range of advantages it offers, teen-agers can enhance their money management skills with much ease, efficacy and convenience. Needless to say, all these positive aspects of providing money stand in a good stead as far as agumenting their chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned.
Furthermore, another pivotal aspect of aforementioned propositions is that it is only likely to help one excel and thrive in varied areas. Besides, they can spend money on things, they actually need rather than the gifted items which they would not ever use. For instance, the study results published by the government of Australia in March 2014 and April 2016 clearly indicate that 60% students preferred to receive money as a present to but useful things namely; electrical gadgets, books and other accessories. Hence, it is apparent why many are in favour of this view point.
On the flip side, a few sections of the society contradict the above-mentioned views by providing some justification. The primary one lies in the fact that teens are not mature enough to use money wisely. They are vulnerable as it may spoil their habbits. Thay may prone to some disgraced activities of taking drugs, joining wrong group and doing other unethical practices which can create threat for their future prospects. Therefore, giving furtune as a gift may be dangerous for their lives.
To conclude having ponderd over above stated it is crystal clear that benefits of providing money as a present is indeed too great to ignore.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (5 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92913385827 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62222720791 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608923884514 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9684211367 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.333333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223078683347 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585010091179 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040011630095 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112648902108 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568339951266 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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