Some people think nations and individuals should focus on their own personal problems rather than global ones To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people think nations and individuals should focus on their own personal problems rather than global ones.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is an opinion that governments and their citizens should approach local issues rather than global ones. I somewhat agree with this notion; however, I think that global problems should not be neglected as well.

First, society should tackle local problems because it would not be ethical to allocate funds to other countries when your own nation is in trouble. As it is known, a large number of countries nowadays are facing social and economic issues, which ought to be addressed immediately; otherwise, they will become even worse. For example, if the government try to help other countries without solving its own country issues and then local unemployment rates will increase as well as the level of life will decrease. Thus, it would be appropriate to provide free education and health service for citizens as well as unemployment benefits, and only after that to help others.

However, there are global issues that affect all people around the world and should be addressed as well. Such problems as pollution the ocean, carbon dioxide emissions, global warming, and famine in Africa and other developing countries in the long term influence overall well-being on the planet Earth. Not solving them may lead to a global catastrophe, when humans will struggle from a shortage of freshwater and food, pollution-related diseases, etc. In fact, everyone should be aware that we are not living in a bubble; we are living in a connected world, where problems in one part are echoing in another part.

In conclusion, I partly agree that societies should concentrate on local problems first because the government is responsible for the well-being of their citizens. However, global issues also should be solved because they influence the quality of life of every human being around the globe.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17064846416 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66540009215 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559726962457 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1841569923 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175142124531 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768569409693 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608897685056 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132995843083 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744153998908 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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