Some people think that people who do physical work should be paid as same as the people who have a high-level degree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that people who do physical work should be paid as same as the people who have a high-level degree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by a significant number of individuals that labour jobs and educated jobs should be considered in terms of salary. I completely disagree and believe that the difference will motivate people to have education and society will not respect the education system if both get equal pay.

To begin with, people will not respect the education system if both labour and educated people are paid with the same salary. Mostly uneducated people do physical work to earn money for living, if they are also provided with same wages as education degree holders are provided, people will not spend time in getting educated as the majority of the youth take education for better future prospects and high earning options. Therefore, there will be no difference in educated and uneducated youths as both will have access to all facilities because of the same salary. Thus salary discrimination is a must to create the importance of education in society.
At the same time, this indifference in salary structure would reduce the value of education in the society, which leads to an increase in illiteracy rate and in the number of undeveloped countries both economically and technologically. This would be because of the fact of equally paid wages that people would be less interested in studying complex subjects such as Mathematics, Statistics and Linguistic studies and end up learning skills which require less intellectual skills and more physical power. For instance, a recent study by World Education Services clearly showed that 90% of the students opt for masters degree to earn telephone digit salaries and only 10% of students do it for their personal interest. Therefore, it is quite obvious that this system would prove to be a big discouragement to higher studies and will pave the way to the scarcity of doctors and engineers in society.

In conclusion, I completely disagree because of the reasons mentioned in the above paragraphs and believe that this difference will create more awareness of acquiring education in a civilized society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14925373134 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83271471675 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501492537313 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3958837827 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.818181818 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4545454545 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176301727117 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699113466704 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610506212406 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102618852303 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615100416813 0.056905535591 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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