Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views

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Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views

It is arguably, who are all doing regular improvements needs to get a reward by everyone, Whereas many people are agreeing achievable candidates need to focus particularly. I am not refusing those who are all achievable but my general opinion needs to show the hard working people by continues improvers.

First up all, those who are all getting high achievements that people are getting recognized by everyone and they can showcase widely. Secondly, these people are getting motivated by everyone in order to their hard work. For instance, Cambridge University and Oxford University are publishing their results on every year in order to motivate their achievers and try to focus and improve other achievers as well due to this every year successive growth increasing a lot.

Nevertheless, those who started from the bottom ranks but slowly getting improvements that people not getting recognized by many people except their parents. If we stimulate them then they can attain anything in the world, else they will not showcase by themselves. Mainly, some people are coming from the very poor background those who are not getting a chance to consummate themselves due to financial problems. We need to tune them to focus their life to gradually increase it. For instance, In Africa, many people are under below poverty but every Olympics we can see a plethora of athletes participating and won the medals as well because they recognized by the Government and highly motivated them without just focus only achievers.

To recapitulate this, many of the success people are getting influenced by all but those who are all eager to achieve and try to improve on everyday, we can tune them more to get success in their life.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...reward by everyone, Whereas many people are agreeing achievable candidates need to focus par...
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Line 8, column 141, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... eager to achieve and try to improve on everyday, we can tune them more to get success i...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0701754386 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73628874298 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515789473684 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5180624796 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116901843198 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542611100652 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425623049506 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844730339269 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376309696796 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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