Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are two views on who must be rewarded by school authorities. Some argue that the ones who excel deserve to be praised while others believe that the pupils who make the most progress must be rewarded. I personally agree with the latter since the second group need more encouragement to continue their path to success.
On the one hand, it is the common belief that people who get the best work done whether in school or at the office must be recognized for their excellence and thus be awarded accordingly. The reason behind this idea is that by praising the perfection everyone tries to get as close as possible to that ideal figure. In other words, by singling out the best, a new role model is set for others to follow his/her foot step. In contrast, rewarding students for their improvements gives the impression that adequacy is acceptable, and there is no need for students to push themselves so hard to be brilliant. Hence, these group are opposing to the idea of advocating imperfection.
On the other hand, students come from various family backgrounds in some of which they never had the opportunity to flourish and learn how to study or the value of education. Therefore, it is not fair to expect them to show the same level of performance as their peers who have been raised in a highly educated atmosphere while they have been constantly reminded of the importance of education. As a result, youth should not be evaluated by their marks but by their efforts. Furthermore, valuing the improvements boosts students' confidence since it gives them the sense of accomplishment. Studies show that even verbal approval from a teacher can significantly influence young adult to believe in themselves and drive them to achieve further goals.
In conclusion, I find the second argument more reasonable and believe that students should be recognized for their efforts and not merely their final grades.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94135802469 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75589978325 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567901234568 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.008219204 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.357142857 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264102305546 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819102795847 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595274378107 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151811312334 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365131974366 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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