You are looking for a part-time job at a football club.Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter,•introduce yourself•explain what experience and special skills you have•tell him/her when you think you could start

Essay topics:

You are looking for a part-time job at a football club.

Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter,

• introduce yourself

• explain what experience and special skills you have

• tell him/her when you think you could start

Dear Mr. Ahmadi,

My name is Behnaz Yousefi. I am sophomore student at University of Tehran majoring in software engineering. Our university is renowned not only for offering best academic skills in Iran but also for its practical courses.

Although I have not finished my study, I have some excellent real life practices as it was expected of us to design and develop a website on our own at the end of the second year. Since I am a true fan of football, I have chosen designing a sport club website as my project. The project was quite a success and I got the highest mark in our class. I have heard from one of my friends, Mr. Smith who works there as coach, you are looking for someone to lunch a similar website for you. I am confident that I have all required qualifications. First of all, I have done it already. Secondly, I know your business very well since I have been interested in sport forever. Besides, my uncle runs a horse club and I had done some part-time job for him while growing up.

Our semester ended just yesterday and I am not planning any tripe. As a matter of fact, I am going to spend the summer in the campus to attend a couple of summer classes. So, I can start my work as soon as we sign the contract.

Looking forward to hearing from you,

Sincerely yours,

Behnaz Yousefi

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Ahmadi, My name is Behnaz Yousefi. I am sophomor...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'offering the best'.
Suggestion: offering the best
...Our university is renowned not only for offering best academic skills in Iran but also for it...
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Line 9, column 230, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to design'.
Suggestion: to design
...m a true fan of football, I have chosen designing a sport club website as my project. The...
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Line 9, column 764, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...part-time job for him while growing up. Our semester ended just yesterday and I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, as a matter of fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1085.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44672131148 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53615021529 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 127.690721649 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622950819672 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3750696898 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3333333333 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2666666667 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188292009762 0.216113520407 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053528390263 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597735914735 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111574458535 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802430485541 0.0580467560999 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 8.37731958763 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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