With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?
Internet attraction has increased dramatically over the few decades. The majority of its users our young adults who use the media to stay connected to their fellows. Although internet can be beneficial in so many ways, the anonymity that it provides makes it a perfect place for criminals to hide out and target naive adolescents who can be deceived easily without the protection of their parents.
First solution to the raised issue is to supervise children activities on the Internet. One way to achieve this goal is to allow children to access a selected set of websites which have been validated by authorities such as government or school council. The limited access protects children from being targeted by terrorists and child-abusers since these sites are under constant surveillance of those who validated them. In addition, those validated websites administrators are always monitoring the users to prevent any kind of report which result in their license removal. On the other hand, parents can decrease the risk of harmful effects of the net by cutting down the number of hours a child is allowed to spend on the Internet. This restriction would help teenagers to pay more attention to their educations and socialize in the real world.
The second approach to prevent any disastrous impact of unsupervised access to the Internet could be teaching kids the downfalls and threats of such network. Studies show that children can detect dangers and avoid them if they had been warned beforehand about the signs of suspicious acts. Parent should accept the fact that they cannot forever shield their offspring from the world. Therefore, it is better to equip them with the knowledge and trust that they are going to make the best decisions.
In conclusion, internet can be used for both malicious and honorable purposes. Therefore, it is one of the responsibilities of a parent to make it a safe environment for their children by setting some rules and controlling their access. Besides, parents should talk to their children about the threats of such media and prepare them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12536443149 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76303637922 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580174927114 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0312383829 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.875 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180924541322 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05386151134 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324711351153 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102564573379 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187838479029 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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