Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people argue that so many resources has been dedicated to preserve the wildlife. I personally believe that the attention they are getting is not even enough to prevent the damage humans has done and are continue to do to the environment.

First of all, for so many years, humans neglected their duty to protect the nature from their own kind. As a result, a great deal of species went extinct due to excessive hunting or ambitious construction projects. Therefore, governments and society have to pay extra attention to preserve the remaining animals. It is crucial to save the environment since it has a substantial effect on people's quality of life. All living creatures, i.e., humans, animals and plants, are part of an enormous life cycle. Thus, dying out of one species certainly impact them all in some level.

Secondly, this generation have an obligation to keep the wild living creature alive for future generations to inherit them so that they can as well appreciate their beauty. For example, it is a shame that Iranian tiger race had gone extinct without next generation being able to visit the tiger in the flesh. Beside admiring the beauty of such animals, their life could be valuable in so many ways. For instance, every animal has its specific characteristics that examining them can help scientist to uncover lots of mysteries. On the other hand, preserving wildlife could be profitable if natural habitats of scarce wild animal were turned to tourism destinations. There are plenty of individuals who are willing to pay noticeable amount of money to see a special bird.

In conclusion, I strongly believe every dime spent on environment is worth it since it affects people's lives indirectly and also is a responsibility that must be fulfilled to give the next generation a better chance of survival and a promising future.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ertainly impact them all in some level. Secondly, this generation have an obliga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00643086817 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78326235797 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610932475884 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.814254403 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.8 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131683559936 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428945815867 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450336791952 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0846989811448 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550485841963 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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