Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Other believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The sense of competition is necessary for development of a society to take it to more advance stages. But as far as children are concerned the sense of collaboration is main factor of grooming. If I have to pick one I will choose the cooperation to make my children useful adults.

Competition develops motivation to win in many fields of life but incase of children studying in schools sense of competing leads to some detrimental effects on their minds. Children are in developing phase their nature, mind and harmones develop gradually. So in this part of their lives sense of competition may backfire their thinking. I think competition is form of two extreme corners either you win or loose. If somebody gains a victory undoubtedly his nature will rekindle with positive effects.

While on other side a child who lost will gave negative effect on his abilities there is a possibility that he may think of gaining stardom by some pasamistic means. So sense of competition encourages selfishness and egoism in child and as a result of which his abilities to become useful adult may viciate.

On the other hand if we seed our child with the sense of cooperation and collaboration Asa result sense of sharing develops in their minds which is very fruitful for them in practical field of life as now a days the whole world is in state of global village so one should has ability to conceiling with some facts and that will come through comradeship.

Anotherr optimistic fact of cooperation is development of mutual benefits. It is a kind of give and take situation. If a person helps the other in his troughs the other will surely return the favor in a same way. Cooperation is like stairs which is a cobination,in today's time the way to get prosperous life is to cooperate with your peers.

If I recapitulate my arguments I will say that competition and collaboration go hand in hand. Competition creates sense of being at the top but incase of children we must encourage cooperation in them. So they compete in healthy enviroment in society. Competition alone may propogate act of jealousy and inferiority complex among children which may lead to drastic result in future.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, while, i think, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85561497326 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88892329034 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8183936436 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5789473684 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259486829888 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776570617734 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448310420246 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13457886021 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407765564699 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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