Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.
Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
Animal sanctuaries or zoos are considered as a brutal place for wild animals and thus should be shut down, according to a few people while others believe that it is the safest place for their survival. In my opinion, I believe zoos do not possess enough resource to take care of animals effectively but if they are developed more it can be turned into a safe heaven for them.
To begin with, there are several evidence which proves how heartlessly animals are treated in certain zoos. Besides, no innocent, whether it is a human or animal, should be put behind the bars and therefore putting them in prison is a crime against nature, which we often turn obvious to. Moreover, Due to insufficient fund, wildlife parks often suffer from scarcity of food and other resources, such as space and manpower, to maintain this places, which eventually leads to mistreatment towards wild animals. For example, on average, only a $500 per park is sanctioned by authorities for the maintenance, according to the survey conducted by PETA. Thus, if zoos cannot be improved, it should be closed right away.
However, where outside world is a threat to several endangered species, zoological parks the safest place for them. Animals are slaughtered to fulfill growing demand of fancy clothes and shoes, which requires animal skin for its manufacturing, so human are the major danger to their existence. Further, due to changes in environment over the time, many species are on the verge of extinction, which can be saved by putting them under special care in zoos. For example, Chinese Pandas are kept in special build zoo where they are protected under constant supervision. Thus, they are more protected inside the zoo than outside.
In conclusion, although animal parks are underfunded and animal are mistreated sometimes, it is the securest place for them. Thus, authorities should invest more in the development of proper parks for animal to preserve the diversity of nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03058103976 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68418620039 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584097859327 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5080638169 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191197127919 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717748410005 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08036432914 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121289620695 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835705281646 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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