Some teachers tend to reward students with high academic results. Others, however, support and reward students that improved their grades. Discuss both approaches. Give your opinion and provide examples.
High academic performance is often viewed by teachers as more important,so they tend to reward those students who achieve high grades. However, other teachers encourage and reward those pupils who bring an improvement in their academic results.In my opinion, I consider that improvement in grades of children should be encouraged and appreciated.
On one hand, some teachers prefer rewarding students for their academic attainment and I agree with this approach.In other words, such high achievers serve as role models for other students and motivates others to excel in their studies which consequently produces better results. For example, students generally apply themselves and work harder when they are in direct competition with their classmates. Furthermore, being driven to achieve the best is vital in order to succeed later in life when, as adults, they must compete against others in the job market.
On the other hand, students showing improvement in grades are often appreciated by their teachers. As all students do not possess the same intellectual ability, giving more emphasis to improvement is a great idea to encourage them to achieve their goals step by step. Without this way of encouragement, less capable students will give up easily and not work hard due to the fear of failing to get maximum scores. Moreover, they are not burdened with the stress of scoring high marks in their exams.
In conclusion, while many people may vary in opinions, i think that students stand a better chance to succeed in school life if tough targets like high academic scores are set as a basis for rewards.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19465648855 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71957479358 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603053435115 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.1760817746 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.1 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.1 7.06120827912 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391474741476 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147619794532 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868724193455 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219507880941 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085316799516 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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