Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Individuals respond differently to every situation.Thus, pupils sometimes give positive results receiving reinforcement,whereas for others, punishment is the best tool to learn.
To lage extent, I concur with the given notion and the reasons will be explicited below.

To commence, the first and foremost reason behind this tendency is lust for learning somthing.Schools and parents award them in returns of their outstanding performance in academics as well as co-curricular activities.Consequently,they work more enthusiasticly and with positive energy,which results in success in every field. Additionally,certain children do not work appropriately, when they are scolded and forced to learn new knowledge.Oppositly, giving punishment might result in negative consequences likeas stubborness and behavioural problems. As, physical punishment is completely banned in these days.

Probing further,young children are very sensitive towards the things, specially the way they are treated.So, they should be treated very politely so that would not face any kind of trauma and distressed situation, which might become hindrance in their acaddmic progress and physical growth as well. A recent survey inferred that the schoolchildren who were given positive feedback, were able to secure higher grades in examination than those who were punitive.

On the flip side, in few cases, it becomes mandatory to panalize children, when they are not bringing deasirable results inspite of having all the ammenities available.They use to make lame excuses for not executing their school work or other activities. Therefore, in this situations, parents should give small punishments like limited time for watching television and restricting favourite activities. Moreover, by doing so they can realise their mistakes and do not tend to repeat.

Conclusively, retributing disciples and allocating awards has both efficacious and precarious sides and depends upon the situation and type of student what suits the best.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as for, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92439862543 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.66487071834 2.80592935109 131% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683848797251 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.7803109082 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.727272727 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147322711129 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511825287649 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03338117024 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654476736301 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340569049873 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.73 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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