Task II
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
You should spend 40 minutes on this topic.
Some people believe that children spend too much time watching television or playing computer games. They feel that this time could be used more productively.
Do you agree? How do you think children should spend their free time?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Today's children spend a huge amount of their free time on watching TV and playing video games. This situation concerns many adults who tend to believe that our progeny ought to spend their spare time on something useful such as reading and socializing. This viewpoint is shared by me as well.
To begin with, reading is a decent way to spend one's free time. For example, reading allows a person to develop logic, memory as well as imagination. Written information gives us an indispensable opportunity to transfer knowledge of our predecessors to a new generation and a child who devotes his or her spare time to reading will be better prepared for school and consequently, the one will have higher marks. For instance, when I was a pupil I liked reading classic books which were written by such famous writers as Shakespeare and Hamenguway. As the result of the activity, my marks at English and literature were the highest in my class.
Secondly, socializing is another extremely useful way to spend time on. We all live in society, we are inseparable from it and learning how to interact with others efficiently might be an enormously beneficial skill. Although someone may say that playing computer games in particular online ones may be perceived as a way to socialize, I cannot agree with it because real personal interaction cannot be substituted. In fact, I tend to believe that the current trend of playing online games may have a negative effect on people. My stance is based on the fact that the majority of social skills is learned via interaction with others. At early age, we learn social norms from our caretakers; at the adolescence, we learn from other teenagers. A person who devotes his or her free time to the games may not get so needed social knowledge and thus the one might not form necessary social skills.
To sum up, wasting spare time on watching television and playing computer games not only useless but even harmful and children ought to be encouraged to spend their free time on useful activities such as reading and socializing.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
read the topic carefully. There are two questions:
1. Do you agree?
2. How do you think children should spend their free time?
So we need one paragraph for the disadvantages of 'children spend too much time watching television or playing computer games'.
while 'reading and socializing' can be put in one paragraph with less content.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1677 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.737 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.649 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.34 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in fact, in particular, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85593220339 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73245040777 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6117722284 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.4375 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155499632957 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595940550431 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670170676809 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127570849522 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842169485331 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.