There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is ongoing debate that some physical subjects like sports and cooking should be substitute from academic syllabus as it is a strain on student's academic performance. While there are positive and negative implications of removing physical education and cookery classes, I disagree with the notion that balance between practical and theoretical knowledge is vital for children.
To begin with, removing academic subjects, which are not part of curriculum, is great way to concentrate on academic syllabus. To explain, if students only focus on theoretical subjects, they would have a less burden as they would not have extra curricular activities. Moreover, there are a number of subjects in particular grade which would put students in to dilemma, which make them to worry during school time as well as at home. Consequently, this thinking behaviour will lead them to health and mental disorders such as depression and anxiety. In many Asian countries, parents have seen the children falling into stress of academic pressure when children have sports, music and cooking classes at same time.
Conversely, with the theoretical subjects, it is also important the physical growth of children. Thus, providing physical lessons like dance, sports, and music will enhance the cognitive abilities and physical strength of children. For example, many parents allow their children to select extra activities beside education in Western and European countries, which eventually helped students in academic performance. Moreover, this outside syllabus training will also help children who are not performing well in academic assessment, resulting into pursue the professional career in these recreational activities.
In conclusion, to reiterate that adding extra supplements in school put a lot of strain on children's performance, being anxious and worried during school time. However, in my opinion, if both parents and teachers help children arranging subjects well with non-academic subjects, undoubtedly this balance would enable better efficiency in academic success.
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Message: Did you mean 'substituted'?
Suggestion: substituted
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, conversely, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86437263517 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554838709677 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6422240802 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.923076923 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0769230769 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283960680917 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101034117836 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699625082284 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186573759489 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558486710454 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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