Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age most of the young adults tend to use their personal computers most of the time for their leisure and entertainment. Which I agree to this notion that prolong exposure of computers can harm them in a numerous ways.
To start with, since that every day technology evolves in a swift way in the sense that most of the children are using gadgets. When they want to learn something, watch certain TV shows or if they want to hear a song from a rock band. Although it is helpful to them health officials are giving them a lot of warnings because of negative effects that it gives to most of the people today. The World Health Organization are creating advertisement on what are effects of extended exposure to computers like blurred vision, head ache or muscle pain. That is why most of the schools are only giving their students enough to use their computers for their education.
Moreover, most of the parents tend to give their children access to computers at an early age but they are not aware that it could give their child health problems in the future. This would also affect the way they interact with people because a lot of younglings are into social networking which greatly affects their interpersonal and communication skill. Unlike in the old days that most of the populace are going out of houses and talking with each other or meeting new individuals. This is one of the major drawbacks that could affect the next generation which could give them a lazy perspective to life.
In summary, I emphatically agree that prolong use of computers can harm young adults. In their health and also the way they interact with people in the near future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: way
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Message: Consider replacing "in a swift way" with adverb for "swift"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...since that every day technology evolves in a swift way in the sense that most of the children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, in summary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67905405405 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4934515221 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506756756757 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0298577342 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.538461538 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162668952717 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671465245508 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654904004186 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120510243402 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494603219912 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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