While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenditure. What are the benefits and drawbacks of such decision?

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While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenditure. What are the benefits and drawbacks of such decision?

To cope with the expenses incurred in education, some pupils tend to indulge in the part time jobs. This essay sheds light on advantages and disadvantages of this inclination.

On the positive side, learning the value of money as well as enhancement in experience are two major traits that after school working students can develop. Considering monetary value at first, before spending even a single penny, working learners think twice as this is their hard earned money. As for experience, while working, pupils develop inter-personal skills like team work, handling customers, communication skills are to name just a few which are fruitful in their future professional life. My best friend, Peter, is a good paradigm of this who is working in Dominos as an order receiver guy and his soft skills are far better than other classmates. Hence, with these pivotal skills part time workers not only can secure appropriate employment for future but also can easily climb their career ladder for better prospects.

On the negative side, working on evenings can have adverse impacts on academics and overall growth of the pupils. In order to cater the responsibilities of their work, students have to render a considerable amount of time to the work and they are left with no time to dispense for their academic excellence. Even, part time workers cannot devote their time for extra-curricular activities, such as sports, art and craft, which pose a threat on their holistic development. If I talk about Peter only, after returning from school, he runs to his work and come back to home then sleep, due to exertion. Peter, along with many other students with same condition are deprived from beneficial life skills.

In conclusion, despite the pros, hands-on experience and rational approach for money management, for part time working students, I believe cons, poor academic performance as well as inadequate comprehensive development, are too dire to ignore.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, well, while, as for, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19558359621 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8362867073 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5865131099 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.692307692 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0832976023369 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335621986294 0.084324248473 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312606389209 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0481110431733 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332047297534 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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