You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situati

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request a change of my hostel room, owing to the disturbances created by my roommate.

Currently, I am sharing a hostel room with a final year student. Due to his seniority, he behaves adamantly and is not co-operative in any manner. Moreover, he has a careless approach towards everything.

Firstly, he always leaves the room door open, which is a severe security breach and is perilous for our life. Secondly, the room is mostly occupied with his friends, who adds on to the issues, by smoking and drinking inside the room. Consequently, all these affect my studies, as my concentration is highly impacted in such an agonizing environment.

Therefore, I would prefer to move to a single bed hostel room, so I can focus properly on this semester exams. Also, I would like to have a room on the top floor, as it is mostly vacant and quiet enough to study efficiently.

Hope you will consider this as a crucial matter, and re-allocate me to a new room as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,
David Joe

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 14, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ossible. Yours faithfully, David Joe
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 1615.20841683 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 186.0 315.596192385 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75806451613 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84013995411 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672043010753 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 506.74238477 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.243379464 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4545454545 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163616754349 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539486706199 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492233899282 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081168507358 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243588531481 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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