You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

A serious issue which has been plaguing a lot of countries in recent years is that of increase in obesity amongst the children. It is becoming a serious issue, which is going to affect future generations to come. This essay will discuss some of the reasons, why this problem has occurred in first place and their possible consequences.

There are multiple reasons for the increase in the obesity amongst children but the primary reason which I think led to this issue are Environment and lifestyle. The current lifestyle and urbanization in wealthy countries make it virtually impossible for children to venture out and engage in outdoor sports. Not enough open areas or parks contribute to the issue to a large extent. Consequently, the children like to spend their time watching TV and playing video games for most of the time. In addition to this, Junk food and fast food multiplies the obesity, resulting into an entire generation of overweight children.

The dangerous consequences are already being seen amongst the current generation. Overall immunity of young people has decreased to a great extent. Fever, Joint pains etc are becoming very common these days. Health problems like heart disease and diabetes can be found in teenagers. These issues create problems for these children’s life-long and they are left to deal with this. Over and above, the children become introvert and shy as they feel they will not be accepted in society due to their overweight body and everyone will make fun of them.

In conclusion, it is clear that being overweight has a lot of negative impact on children’s lives. Unless and until strong steps are taken by everyone against this serious issue, future generations are at the risk of facing even more dangerous task of rebuilding.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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...ire generation of overweight children. The dangerous consequences are already b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08474576271 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72501894287 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593220338983 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2415215868 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.75 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283316663732 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783138464765 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640356650773 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164635093231 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475086205779 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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