1 If you are required to give feedback about your classmates colleagues work or performance would you like to give positive comments or negative comments first

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1. If you are required to give feedback about your classmates/colleagues (work or performance), would you like to give positive comments or negative comments first?

There is no doubt that nowadays, giving feedback plays pivotal role in improving colleagues’ performance. No one can deny the effect of this on our professionals’ lives. Some may take the opinion that giving positive comments first is better but may some take an opposite viewpoint and say that giving negative comments first because they are very important for improving people. From my own perspective, the former belief is true due two reasons which I will discuss in paragraphs below.

The first noteworthy reason is when you give positive comments to your colleagues first, she trusts you more than the time you say negative comments first. Because people naturally reluctant to hear negative opinion about themselves because they think it decreases their self-esteem. So, if you assert something negative about them first they maybe feel uncomfortable and resent you and sometime ignore what you say and think you might be wrong or jealous of them. As result they defiant with you and maybe starting dispute to each other. In the other hand if you say positive comments about your colleagues first, it paves the way for you to tell negative point so easily. Because people have tendency to hear about their positive characteristics, so, when you would say it to them fist, they relied on your talk and then when you said their negative point they could accepted and thought about them. For instance, I had sensitive colleague in their company. When she took mistakes in her duties, no one could tell her mistakes. because when she heard something negative about herself, she started brawling with whom said this. One day, one psychologist came to their office and suggested us telling her positive point first then, when she relied on us, saying negative comments. It is great solution that help us to communicate with our colleagues better than before.

The second reason is that if you say positive comments first, your colleagues realize that you really want to help because you loved them. When you tell positive point first, your colleagues understand that you entirely see their strong point of their personality and you really want to improve their mistakes and help them to eliminate their mistakes. So, they can accept your negative comments easily and be grateful about you to tell them their negative points too. This situation provides an opportunity for you and your colleagues to become close friends along with you are best colleagues too. From my own experience, when I told my sensitive colleagues positive point first, it paved the way for me to told her negative point too. Furthermore, it helped us to became closer to each other and now we are close friend.

At the end of the discussion, although, saying negative point is more helpful for people than positives, but telling positive point first, paves the way for asserting negative point furthermore helped the people to accepted negative point easily

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Average: 4.5 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...our professionals' lives. Some may take the opinion that giving positive commen...
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Line 3, column 870, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'accept'
Suggestion: accept
...ou said their negative point they could accepted and thought about them. For instance, I...
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Line 3, column 1031, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...duties, no one could tell her mistakes. because when she heard something negative about...
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Line 5, column 576, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the best'.
Suggestion: are the best
... to become close friends along with you are best colleagues too. From my own experience,...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, then, for instance, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 43.0788530466 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05954825462 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60957271509 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435318275154 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8227388114 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1363636364 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400265654295 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13678378098 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130900204758 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241305437269 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109036388315 0.0645574589148 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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