do you agree or disagree with this statement that it is important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than improve public transportation
There is no doubt that nowadays, governments’ decisions play pivotal role in the future of countries. Controversy exists whether governments should invest money to improve access to the internet or develop public transportation system. In my vantage point, government should spend money on improving access to the internet in that not only does internet flourish financial situation of countries, but also it can save the environment.
To begin with, if governments invest money to improve access to the internet, its help them to flourish economy. Nowadays, internet is the quick and most cost-effective way for communication between people even between nations. A lots of companies all around the world, use internet to advertise and sell their products. it because with the pleasure of internet, companies can submit their products on website so easily and a lots of people from different countries can see and choose and buy them. Its proves that the internet is a most cost-effective way for selling products instead of sending booklet or advertising on TV. On the other hand, if companies have chance to sell their products to all around the world and export them, it causes the flourishing in economy. In addition, if economy flourished, governments have more budget to invest money on developing infrastructures like roads, schools, public transportation. Thus, it seems pay more attention to internet access, ultimately develop public transportations too. Imaging a country whom invest money on infrastructure like public transportation system, if it does not have any strong way to obtain money like export products, it does not finance for projects.
The second reason is that the internet is one of the most environmental friendly way that can help the countries to achieve sustainable development. Todays, the consumption of oil and gas all over the world increased and its becomes a world worry for all countries and nations. ‘Sustainable development’ is the influential respond for this concern. This theory states that if work place and home become closer, the need for Commuting decreased as a result, the consumption of oil and gas reduce. To achieving this goal, a lot of solution proposed like develop public transportation, use green infrastructure, is a term known for urban designers, and like others. But one of the most significant answer for reducing use of oil and gas, is use of internet for remoting work. Job traffic have large amount to consuming oil and gas in addition causes air pollution. By using internet, people can stay home and do freelance job without any need to go out. It seems if this way broadened, in forthcoming years, the request for public transportation will be decreased too. For instance, consider the city that all of the people in there, use internet to do their jobs in addition buy their living staff like food, clothes, tickets on website. Thus, this people does not have any needs to go out every day with their cars or bus or subways and they can stay home and only go there for entertainments. So, when the request for commuting diminish consequently, the ask for public transportation reduce too.
All in all, if governments invest money to develop access to internet, this act not only flourish economy but also protect the environment. Now, who can overlook the vital role of the internet in all aspects of our life?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: A lot; Lots
...on between people even between nations. A lots of companies all around the world, use ...
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Suggestion: It
...t to advertise and sell their products. it because with the pleasure of internet, ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...their products on website so easily and a lots of people from different countries can ...
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Message: Did you mean 'proofs' (noun) instead of proves (verb)?
Suggestion: proofs
...es can see and choose and buy them. Its proves that the internet is a most cost-effect...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...o. For instance, consider the city that all of the people in there, use internet to do the...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ood, clothes, tickets on website. Thus, this people does not have any needs to go ou...
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, second, so, thus, for instance, in addition, no doubt, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2850.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13513513514 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06736634654 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459459459459 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6740598635 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.615384615 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3461538462 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19230769231 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303297034429 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923775752583 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769169917513 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202864998751 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652328523262 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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