Nowadays some schools focus not only on academic studies but physical activities as well. Unfortunately this is not the case in my area. In my opinion physical activities are crucial for chilrden and they should be included in schedule of every school. This feature will have a lot of benefits for children.
Firstly, Health should be a priority for every human and children are no different. Every parent wants their children to be healthy. Physical exercises at school can help children deal with already existing health issues or prevent serious diseases. Regular exercises and sport also help children in Strengthening bones and muscles.
Furthermore, physical activities help the brain in functionating. It also boosts our mood and increases motivation in being more concentrated on lessons. Sports can also help us communicate better with our friends. From my personal experience it is difficult to stay fully concentrated 5-6 hours on lessons without some physical activity. my current and previous schools physical activities were not included in schedule. This meant that in the end of my classes i was emotionally drained and really exhausted. Thankfully as soon as i realised this i started to exercise early in the morning before school and also i decided to start swimming in the local swimming pool. it helped me to calm down, freshen my mind and stay fit. I strongly believe that adding physical activities as a start of the day or as a break between several lessons is a great idea. As a result this will lead to children being more focused on lesson as their mind will be fresh and ready to take information.
In conclusion i fully support the idea that physical excercises should be a requiered part of every school day. This will massively improve children's concentration on lessons, they will get their morale boosted and most importantly they will stay healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, really, so, then, well, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09003215434 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8006486243 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553054662379 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1970107308 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.15 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.55 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20853015083 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068533906264 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783129978473 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143563003253 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243032622191 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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