Nothing could be more valuable than our health. It's power to get anything perfectly done. Nonetheless, t's always been heatedly debated whether universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries on not. Some people hold the opinion that the universities should give the amont of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their libraries. However, others have a negative attitude. If i were forced to agree with one of the position, I would stand behind the former. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.
First, physical exercise will help the overweight students to loose weight. If the school has a gym or swimming pool, definitely students will be encouraged to join, especially if it's not going to cost them extra money. For example, I was always so passionate about working out, as young as 7 years old, Not only I would join the school's running team but also I would travel to compete worldwide. I have never disappointed my school or my family, I always would come back with a medal. One day while I was training, I fell down and injured my knee. Unfortunately, my physician told me that my injury is so severe and i will not be able to run a gain . I remember that I have cried continuously for days but my parents and my friends were very supportive and helped to get through those hard times. Ever since I stopped working out, I had gained so much weight. I have struggled with my weight for years until one my high school friend told me that the our school has opened a swimming pool and its going to be used for rehabilitation. He encouraged me to join, and there I found a lot of injured athletics. We got along very quickly and helped each other to loose wight and stay healthy. That experience taught me a lot about the importance of sports classes in schools.
Seconds, sports will cause students to feel happier and more relaxed. A lot of researches have shown that working out not only will lower the depression rates but also boost our positive feelings.. For instance, few days ago I read an article about what happens to our brains when we exercise, and how it makes us feel refreshed by releasing the hormone of happiness which called "Endorphins". The article states that Endorphins act as analgestics, which means they diminish the perception of pain. They also act as a sedatives, and in this way it will trigger our positive feelings, reduce stress, ward-off anxiety and improve sleep. As you can see, exercise will benefit the students' mental health as well as their physical health.
In sum, though some students may oppose my opinion that schools should give the sports' activities the same amount of money as they gave to their libraries, others may not. Not only it will help overweight students to loose weight but also it will add a lot of benefits to their health. Every school should pay more attention to their sport activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2460.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7216890595 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68719801309 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510556621881 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3458831691 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8571428571 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6071428571 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96428571429 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180632264605 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459017086237 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440357186235 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111450509766 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327663686308 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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