26. Do you agree with the statement that the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important for the young people than they are to the older people?
This is undeniable that some young people tend to trust their favorable celebrities. Older people have a wider mind than young people do, therefore they have less tendency toward celebrities and they make their choice based on experiences that got during their life. Personally, I think young people can easily affected by their favorable celebrities.
- To begin with, famous people have many fans who follow them without thinking. They tend to imitate the behavior and life style of their favorable celebrity. Young people have a limited perspective toward the life and they think that following life style and belief of famous people would help them to make a better life for themselves. Unfortunately, in my country we faced with such problem in the last election. Most people followed the celebrities and voted to a wrong person who ruined the economy of the country. In my opinion, famous people are not always wise persons. We all know that many of politician or producer use celebrities to influence people and thus all famous people are not reliable. Moreover, opinions of famous people are not always right and make many mistakes in their lives.
- On the other hand, older people have experienced different things in their life and thus they make their decisions based on their experiences. Experience is the best teacher of human and people cannot learn many things without experiencing them. In comparison to young children, older people have a wider horizon. They can see things from different point of views and thus they can make better choices than that of youngsters.
In conclusion, I believe that the attitudes and belief of famous people is more effective on younger people. As young people have less experiences they tend to follow the celebrities, while older people make their choices based on their experiences. Regarding to their age, people who have an organized plan for their lives do not follow any opinion without considering it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11180124224 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59831086022 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475155279503 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6050021361 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4444444444 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344925692815 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134580079531 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531078311523 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243269040726 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433833331085 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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