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We are living in an information era and information is becoming increasingly important for our lives. Faced with the information explosion, some people may choose to ignore those events which are far from their daily lives since they think those events are unlikely to influence their lives and it's a waste of time to learn about them. However, in my opinion, it's better for us to know more about affairs happening around the world positively no matter whether those information is relevant with daily life or not. This will become more evident when we look at it through three different perspectives as following.
To begin with, learning about the current affairs around the world is favourable for us to move forward and keep pace with the developed countries. There is an old saying in my country, "life is like rowing upstream, not to advance is to go back". If we only care about what happened in domestic country and stay in original position, we will definitely be surpassed by other countries. For instance, we have learned a lesson from the history. In Qing Dynasty, the government thought they were the best in the world and stopped communicating with foreign countries. Thus they didn't know about the Industry Revolution and how advanced the technology had been developed until the other countries broke our country's door and robbed our country. If the government had paid more attention to the foreign affairs and made better contact with exotic countries to learn the advanced techniques, this lesson wouldn't have got so bad. Even in modern society, we know that smartphone develops very fast today but the cell phone technology in my country is far away advanced. As a result, lots of cell phone companies in my country required their employees to keep watch on the events and techniques of advanced companies such as Apple in order to keep competitive. Thus, knowing current affairs around the world is really important if we want to get progress.
In addition, we can discover more business opportunities if we can pay more attention to events happening on the earth. Because it provides us a good way to see how foreign people live in different cultures. Then we can figure out the different demands between exotic people and native people and we can try to use the advantages of domestic market to compete with exotic companies. For example, the labour force cost in advanced countries is much higher than in China, thus many manmade products in those developed countries are really expensive. Through learning about the marketing affairs around the world, Chinese companies can use this big cost advantage to make much more cheap and high-quality products to export to foreign countries. And it turns out that those manmade products are really competitive when they are faced with foreign companies. Thus, learning about events in other countries can help us find more opportunity to get a successful business.
Admittedly, since the information is too explosive and people are usually busy with their work, lots of people think it’s a waste of time to learn those events that are irrelevant with their daily lives at present. However, it’s really unwise because even though those events cannot affect their daily lives now, they are likely to influence their lives in the future, especially with the fast progress of technology. Today’s people should try to strike a balance of information possession between those happened near their lives and those far away their lives. And the information will definitely be worth the time.
To sum up, it’s really beneficial for people to learn about events happening around the world in order to keep pace with the fast development of society no matter whether those events will affect their daily life or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e unlikely to influence their lives and its a waste of time to learn about them. Ho...
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Line 1, column 462, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
... the world positively no matter whether those information is relevant with daily life or not. Thi...
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Line 2, column 576, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...d communicating with foreign countries. Thus they didnt know about the Industry Revo...
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Line 2, column 586, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ating with foreign countries. Thus they didnt know about the Industry Revolution and ...
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Line 2, column 909, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...rn the advanced techniques, this lesson wouldnt have got so bad. Even in modern society...
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Line 2, column 1086, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun cell seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of cells'.
Suggestion: lots of cells
...ntry is far away advanced. As a result, lots of cell phone companies in my country required ...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ntion to events happening on the earth. Because it provides us a good way to see how fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3176.0 1977.66487455 161% => OK
No of words: 629.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0492845787 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62316905106 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43720190779 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 997.2 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4379803929 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.153846154 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1923076923 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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