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Ever increasing sophistication of our modern world bring about a web of complex relations between different part of aspects of life. In this regret I have to admit that I totally agree with this statement. There are a couple of reasons in support of my idea. Firstly, a small portion of news could indirectly affect persons life. Secondly, businessmen deal with a large number of customers and news could dramatically change their trades. I will elaborate my idea in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first exquisite point to be mention is that some news at first glance seem that irrelevant to you but the reality is something else. For instance, the increasing on price of petroleum for persons who have not cars may not affect their budgets. However, rising petroleum price could increase your bread price or even the smallest commodities. As a result, individuals should be aware of news. In my point of view some report could change your way of life, indirectly.
From another aspect businessman must deal with a large number of variables for their career. The experience of my father could reveal the importance of this factor. My father trades with Syria for a couple of years. He buys goods from Iran and sells them to Syria. After controversy between Iran and United State, my father got in a big trouble due to the Iran sanctions. The story above justify the fact that if he followed irrelevant news on television, his business would change otherwise.
Taken all aspects mentioned above into consideration I pretty convince this is beneficial to be informed on what is happening all parts of the world. News could indirectly cause changes on individuals life, beside, businessmen could get ride of problems by information from all regions. Meanwhile, there are some persons who believe that listening to irrelevant news is nothing but waste of time when these news will not affect your life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...s life. Secondly, businessmen deal with a large number of customers and news could dramatically c...
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Line 4, column 48, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...other aspect businessman must deal with a large number of variables for their career. The experie...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... News could indirectly cause changes on individuals life, beside, businessmen could get rid...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
... news is nothing but waste of time when these news will not affect your life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93333333333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67721741981 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4701359424 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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