Due to the development of technology, people get exposed to many kinds of electronic devices. Especially, the widespread of computers enabled us to easily search information, communicate with others, watch videos and play games. Nowadays, children who are proficient in computers often enjoy games as a hobby. However, I understand the risks of playing games and agree that children should not be allowed to do so.
To begin with, children lack the ability to control themselves. While adults who have self-control over themselves could efficiently allocate time for both their work and hobbies, but children are incontinent. They easily fall into the temptation of games and sometimes neglect their duties. If there's no adult control over children, they are likely to play games until they are exhausted. Also, even if children are not playing games, they find it hard to concentrate on their studies since they easily get distracted by games. As a result, they will lack interest in studying and only think about playing games which will disturb their future development. Therefore, computer games may ruin children's lives.
Furthermore, computer games are detrimental to children because they contain violent and inappropriate material. Although many educational games are in the market, there is much violent and sexually inappropriate contents in some of the games. For example, if children perform a violent move, for example killing another character or stealing money, they are likely to imitate the behavior in real life. Also, if children watch adult contents, then the children will develop wrong ideas on sexes. As a result, children will lose their spiritual purity by watching the inappropriate content on games. This could lead to bad behavior that hurts them and those around them. In these ways, computer games has disadvantages for children.
computer games is bad for children's physical health. For example, some children get headaches or feel tired by just playing games. The electromagnetic waves from computers can damage children's brains and cause fatigue. Not only that, sitting in front of the bright computer screens could heavily strain children's eyes. Because young children's eyes are in the stage of development, they are more susceptible to bright light. Also, eating junk food such as instant noodles or hamburgers while playing gaming could impose a serious threat to children's health. Especially, children stay inactive while they're constantly eating high fat, unhealthy food, they lack physical exercise and sometimes suffer from geriatric diseases. Spending time on computer games could easily threat children's health
Computers, although it may be beneficial to people and children, playing games is harmful because it has bad effects on both their mental and physical health. Moreover, playing games disturbs their studies.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47072072072 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.700144247 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533783783784 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5288428853 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.962962963 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74074074074 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 20.0 3.85842293907 518% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410557368997 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12364494566 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874615258566 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255364200487 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056257904605 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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