After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
A controversial issue relating to whether students should take a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university has been brought to the attention of the public. Relevant authorities are urged that it is important for students to take a year off to join work or visit another country after completing high school. From a personal point of view, the above statement is agreeable for some reasons as below.
To begin with, experiencing different kinds of occupations or having a tour would make young teenagers having a better idea about which career suits them best and can be pursued along with their life. To be more specific, nowadays there’s a high percentage of young people barely understand what the development progress of current society is and which occupation is worth to follow in the long term. In this case, if they could have some time to try diverse works in the community and take a journey to their desired places after graduating from high school, youngsters would possess a deeper recognition and experience of contemporary society. Through which they can make a more considerable decision about their major in college. As a result of first-hand participation, the youth would be more willing to pay attention to their careers instead of keeping learning what they barely understand and without any foresight for the future. On the contrary, if juveniles directly join the college from high school and never have a chance to undergo real society life, they may find that they gradually become not suitable for the specialty since the domain may be chosen from their parents or tutors opinions rather than being highly dependent on their own knowledge. Therefore, it is necessary for adolescents to undergo periodic time to take a business or travel before they enter a university.
What is more, pupils would learn that liveliness is full of hardship and be willing to devote more energy and time to study if they could participate in a profession and take a tour to additional region after finishing high school. It is widely acknowledged that modern children have put in most of their energy to study and spend a lot of time on campus so that they have few opportunities to enjoy life outside the campus. Contrary to always staying at institution, if the youth could go through social activities, they may realize that every penny is hard to win and their present life is deserving to be cherished. Thus, they would take their research more seriously and receive more accomplishments in the future with that minds mentioned previously in their heads. However, without undergoing growth in public, youngsters would consider that liveliness is as comfortable as the one in campus, which would lead them to lose the diligent habits and generate a solid thought as without too much efforts they can still have a decent life. . And it would be a tough moment after graduated, in which case they might lose confidence or ambitions to try to find a job. Therefore, every kid should comprehend the real world in advance and put much of their power into the academic area.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, adolescents should spend at least a year off to take an enterprise or journey before they start learning at a college because those treasured acquaintances would let them realize the befitting domain for them and they would also value campus life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, at least, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2831.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91493055556 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68565766142 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9304955761 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.277777778 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322672747076 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106724545146 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126126384933 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25450209394 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155017039497 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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