Agree/ disagree with the statement that people today spend too much time on their enjoyment
Entertainment is an important part of our lives. People try to not neglect that part because it is somthing that contributes to their quality of life. It is thought by some people that noadays people spend a lot of time on entertaining themselves, rather than do important things. This essay will discuss why in fact, today people do not spent time on personal enjoyment.
Contrary to the belief that people invest a lot of time on personal relaxation and hubbies, evidence shows that our society is not experiencing that kind of enjoyment that they should. For example, statistics have revealed that 89 percent of people today live with a condition that is called unhappyness. Compare that with others that might not have experienced that feeling, yet. Nowadays people are very busy because they have to work hard to earn enough money to live a quite life. It is clear that when you dont have time , you might not be able to spend too much to enjoy yourself.
Secondly, it is important to consider that people would need money to fulfill their hobbies and have the luxury to entertain themselves. In this time of age, our economy is not where supposed to be. Consequently, people do not have enough money to please themselves. An average wage is not enough to cover the basic expendiotures. If people do not have money, how could they spend it for entertainment. Because of this, I think that people do not have money to spend on entertainment. As a result, they do not have time to please themselves because they have to work to earn enough, so they can live a normal life.
In conclusion. I believe that people do not spend a lot of time on personal enjoyment because they do not have time and money in order to do that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('life') instead of another adjective.
... work hard to earn enough money to live a quite life. It is clear that when you dont have ti...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...a quite life. It is clear that when you dont have time , you might not be able to sp...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...It is clear that when you dont have time , you might not be able to spend too much...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66013071895 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64471043978 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460784313725 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6223005369 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8823529412 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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