Agree or Disagree with the following statement
Television advertising directed toward young children (ages 2 to 5) should be prohibited.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
I agree with the statement, that television advertising toward children under the age 5 should not be allowed. Indeed, the advertisements are the best way for the vendors to reach their customers, to advertise their products and to increase their economy growth. But the question is, What happens when they target younger kids under age 5, Who is responsible for the consequences?. These are explained in the following essay.
Young children are the ones who have the potential to learn and grasp everything fast. They don't have the ability to rely on something or to make a judgement whether it is good or bad. With this ability as a quick learner, they imitate the things they see. For instance, My cousin was 3 year old, he saw an advertisement which shows the kid flying after he had an energy drink. Out of curiosity, he also drank the drink and dropped from the first floor of the building assuming he would fly. Immediately, he dropped down and went for an emergency situation. Hence, targeting young kids should be prohibited.
Indeed, the advertisement companies should prohibit targeting young children. Additionally, the parents also should take care of their children. By only prohibiting the Advertising will resolve the problem, the children can gather knowledge through a lots of resources like Mobile phones, Wall posters etc. So, it is not only the Television advertisement companies to blame. Moreover, it is the responsibility of parents to watch over their kids every minute. By showing selected advertisements will reduce the impact of advertisement over children.
To sum it up, Television advertisement added with parents responsibility will cut the bad effects on children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, moreover, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 276.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20289855072 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00692987683 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601449275362 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5903563969 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.7777777778 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222941054151 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785289550614 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873469026048 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13522236885 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450149519372 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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