Agree or disagree? Getting advice from friends who are older than you is most valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.
Learning from friends is always the most efficient method to improve ourself. Some people prefer to get advice from friends at their age, while others prefer getting advice from friends who are older than them. In my opinion, I prefer the latter choice.
To begin with, we can solve the problem more effectively because friends who are older than us will view things from a different view-point. When they look things in a different way, we will be able to find out more problems and figure out solutions to solve these problems. For example, when I was in high school, I often need to deal with many group projects. We always like to went to others' house to work on the projects together. When I was facing any difficulties, instead of asking my group members, I asked their older brothers or sisters to help. They always gave me some astonishing view points or problems of the project that I never thought of before. Therefore, I found out that by asking friends who are older than me can I understand more problems of my project. As a result, it can be a lot more efficient for me to solve the problem and improve the quality of the project. Thus, because of this reason, I personally believe that it is better to get advice from friends who are older than me.
In addition, if we get advice from friends who are older than us, we can also learn a lot from them. For example, since I am a high school student now, for me, older friends means that they should already start attending college or work. Therefore, most of them will know more than me. Since they are highly educated, they will be able to give me a possible explanation about the reason why they suggest me this advice. As a result, I will not only receive the better choice, but also learn about why do they think so. On the other hand, if people get advice from friends at their age, they may still get an advice, but not with an explanation because friends at the same age as them do not have the ability to do so. Therefore, since we can both learn and get a better advice from older friends, this is the reason why I prefer this idea.
Undoubtedly, some people may say that it is better to learn from friends at the same age, because since they are all at a similar situation, they will be able to solve the problem more easily. However, I think it is because they are at a similar situation so they can not solve the problem effectively. They might miss some problem because they all think in the same way. As a result, people at an older age will look things in a different point of view, so they will be more likely to solve the problem. Therefore, I prefer to get ideas and learn from friends who are older than me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...erent view-point. When they look things in a different way, we will be able to find out more probl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3872255489 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27802319648 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.379241516966 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 3.51792114695 398% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1298163729 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5833333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345677773357 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129233053885 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158617928296 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28601765387 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125613913908 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.36 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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