Agree or Disagree you the with the Do at The following Statement?
People spend TOO much Time Today Personal Enjoyment ON-doing Things They like to do-Rather Within last doing Things They SHOULD do.
The Use specific examples and Reasons to Support your answ
No doubt the improvement in the technology brings a lot of places and things for people to enjoy and have fun. Some people believe these days we spend much more time in enjoying ourselves and doing things we love and like than doing necessary things like study, work or finish our responsibilities. In contrary, others disagree, they think this improvement makes our lives more complicated and busiest than our parents, in a way we can not enjoy our lives. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the second position. I think we lack the free time, everything to enjoy or having fun is expensive, and a lot of responsibilities deprive us of wasting our lucky time and have a good time. Following a brief explanation to support my perspective.
First of all, many people think the invitation of the internet and the machine make our lives easier in many ways. However, it makes our jobs more complicated and our professional skills harder than before; therefore, employees need to work more than ten to twelve hours daily. Also, students spent more than eight hours locked inside their schools for education and learning high and advanced academic subjects. Furthermore, to be successful in both fields: your career, and your education, you need to add extra hours from your daily life to practice and doing your homework at your house. Consequently, when will be the free time for us to have that much fun? For instance, I work as a pharmacy technician part time which is thirty hours weekly, and my husband is a doctor he is working full-time job about forty hours weekly. We both do not have a chance to plan anything for enjoyment. In fact, we barely have time to do shopping or support our kids with their studying curriculum.
Secondly, it is true if we have numerous things to do for having fun, starting from public parks, recreational activities, and amusement parks. Nevertheless, do you think taking care of those place are free? We have to pay for every single thing. Our paycheck is insufficient to support or daily households bills such as our mortgages, our car leases, or our individual details of payment expenses. For example, my husband and I need to wait at least six months every year to enjoy our vacations and have family fun. We need to put some money aside for having a good time. Parks, restaurants and amusement parks need at least one thousand dollars from our wages. In fact, it 's hard for a family of five members to save that money.
Last but not the least, if you are lucky enough to have well-paid job and couple days of free time a week. I doubt if you will be able to free yourself from your extra household responsibilities. Our generation has much more time for doing things fundamentally for their families. Such as using that spare time to let their kids having fun in the playing ground rather than doing something for themselves, for example doing sports, such as cycling, boating, hang out with friends. For me, I miss that free time before being a mother. Today I have to think first of my kids instead of myself's wishes.
Based on the factors discussed above, I think our very busy schedule, or expensive lifestyle and our extra-responsibilities are depriving us of having that much time of fun and enjoyment.
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Essay evaluation report
Following a brief explanation to support my perspective.
Following is a brief explanation to support my perspective.
flaws:
No. of Words: 569 350 //maybe less examples
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 569 350
No. of Characters: 2613 1500
No. of Different Words: 272 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.884 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.592 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.63 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.621 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.845 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.724 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.291 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 709, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...stance, I work as a pharmacy technician part time which is thirty hours weekly, and my hu...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'first of all', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233908948195 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0926216640502 0.0866891130778 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0486656200942 0.046263068375 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.103610675039 0.0685040099705 151% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111459968603 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0361067503925 0.0351676179071 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7460013179 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0345368916797 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00156985871272 0.00188951952338 83% => OK
Determiners: 0.0549450549451 0.0887237588012 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00470957613815 0.0209618222197 22% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00313971742543 0.0139019557991 23% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3251.0 2387.08602151 136% => OK
No of words: 570.0 408.028673835 140% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70350877193 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.289473684211 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147368421053 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10701754386 0.112833075102 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7460013179 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49298245614 0.524397521467 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 60.0491451443 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6551724138 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4938673691 48.84282405 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.103448276 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6551724138 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.758620689655 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 39.6551724138 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.24615384615 1.45489161554 86% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316545477957 0.300154397459 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.070704995434 0.103427244359 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0613351990178 0.0752933317313 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.417366495993 0.497263757937 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160454605844 0.151897553556 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994375329948 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565300083892 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.347504703256 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0949753394605 0.067059652881 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202003089585 0.210909579961 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615105807435 0.0618886996521 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8870967742 202% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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