Agree or Disagree:The most important ways to improve the people’s health is to clean the environment.
Rachel Carson, the author of “Silent Spring,” published this astonishing book in 1962 that transmitted this alarming message: Can you imagine flocks of birds flew freely or sung happily when perched on tree branches in the past but now they suddenly disappear, nowhere to be seen? The culprit is the exploitation of DDT. Discerning the drawbacks and potential harms caused by DDT, Carson has duly reminded human beings of the damage we are causing to environment. A devastated environment is just like a malignant tumor, inflicting pains and compromising our well-being. Therefore, it is of my opinion that the most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
To begin with, a clean environment can effectively filter out noisome pollutants in the air, which spares people from common ailments, such as skin problems or respiratory diseases and makes people more physically robust. Taiwan has witnessed an exponential development in infrastructure and the meteoric growth in the ownership of private vehicles for the past decades. However, the seemingly fast development belies an accompanying repercussion on the environment: the amount of carbon monoxide and sulfur dioxide in the air has been on the rise. Such increase not only makes the quality of the air unbearably bad but also contributes to many local residents contracted with lung cancers. Noticing this severe problem, Taiwanese government has commenced to initiate some tree-planting programs to help mitigate the impact that bumper-to-bumper traffic has exerted on the environment. Since trees can help absorb those pollutants, it has been noticed that the rate of people contracting lung cancers has dropped by twenty-percent. A clean environment is conducive to and paramount in reducing our chances of getting physically ill.
Furthermore, a clean environment is the very first step to motivate people to lead a healthy lifestyle. Imagine a city where it were plagued with smog, filled with dust. People around you were all wearing gas masks and gloves. The visibility was so low that you could barely see your hands. Would you desire to go outside and jog under this condition? Or imagine that rural areas where all of your food ingredients came from were heavily polluted by metals, such as zinc and copper. The earth was filled with these toxic elements and so was your food. Therefore, instead of consuming these contaminated conventionally grown agricultural yields, you chose to wolf down artificially-made products that are made of ingredients which are far from wholesome, or even worse to your well-being. Would that do any good to your health? Therefore, I think a clean environment is crucial in helping a person establish the motivation of living in a healthy fashion.
Irrefutably, some dissidents may disavow my argument by asserting that cleaning the environment might not be the most effective way to improve people’s health since there are many other factors at play that affect their well-beings. For example, people might come down with cardiovascular diseases, such as stroke or heart attack, if their diets mainly consist of high content of salt or saturated fat. However, have those people forgotten that the most fundamental element for people to go on for a healthy diet or to be willing to step out to exercise regularly is to have a clean environment where they can immerse themselves or where their freshly-grown food can be produced? Or have they not realized that a pristine environment condition is pivotal in helping a person stay mentally and physically sturdy? Hence, I strongly contend that there is no measure more effective than cleaning up the environment to make a person healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3145.0 1977.66487455 159% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26800670017 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05979216807 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 331.0 212.727598566 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554438860972 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5806925122 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.481481481 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222620487077 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589367699855 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117721635581 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137887812564 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718389294371 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 86.8835125448 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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