agree or not? people learn better from those who are at the same level of them rather than those people who are at high rank
In each society, a group of people has a deep influence on others, and everyone tries to learn from them. In some countries, celebrities have the strongest impact on the people, while in others, scientists or well-educated people put more influence. Some individuals believe no matter were a person lives, he will learn better from those people who are experiencing similar situations as him, While, others think people would prefer to learn more from those who are ranked higher than them. I agree with the second group of people and will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, higher level people have more experiences and can teach others better. As a person gains more knowledge in a field, he can see different aspects of a topic, and as a result, can teach them better. In this case, people would prefer to learn from him more. This is while, those people who are at the same level, have almost equivalent knowledge and may not be able to teach each other new things. In each society, elder are among that group of people with lots of valuable experiences, and that can illustrate why most of the people chose them to learn from. As an example, I can mention my own country, Iran. In Iran, older people receive lots of respects, and most of it is due to their precious knowledge which people can learn from. When a person get retired, most of the big and well-known companies of my country hire him as a counselor, and it is because they all value his information which is gained through a long process of facing to different situations.
Second, people set higher ranked people as their role models and try to follow and learn from them. Being appointed to a highly-ranked position is a result of hard working and having amazing knowledge and experiences which makes high ranked people good teachers. Most of the people believe if they follow the path which successful people have passed, they will achieve amazing results. In this way, they try to follow each step their role models make and learn from them carefully. On the other hand, people with the same level of job position cannot obtain any especial success by following each other, and that leads to not choosing them as supervisors. My own experience is a compelling example of this point. I believe Elon Musk is a real genius and chose him as my role model. I checked his daily life schedule and decided to act based on it each single day. After one year, I could fulfill all my goals and besides that, learned so many new skills. In my view, if I wanted to follow some of my friends who are in the same level as mine, I could not reach this level of success. My viewpoint is that, this personal belief can be expand to almost all the people, and that is why my conviction is that people consider higher level individuals as those who can learn from them.
To sum up, nowadays, there is no limit in the sources people can use to learn from them. Among these various resources highly ranked people are the most favorable among others. By following them, people can obtain some precious experiences which may take a life time to learn them. Moreover, all successful people have a deep influence on societies and based on that people incline to learn from them more. To take all these justifications into account, my conviction is that people seek more to learn from highly ranked individuals who can teach them better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 321, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...tter were a person lives, he will learn better from those people who are experiencing ...
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Line 8, column 258, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...e precious experiences which may take a life time to learn them. Moreover, all successful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, while, as a result, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2826.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 605.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67107438017 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4318852726 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421487603306 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 866.7 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5240406402 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.928571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6071428571 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03571428571 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43869757579 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129117227132 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986108644684 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311419100974 0.150856017488 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375744572976 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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