Agree/Disagree
Movies and TV programs have more negative effects than negative effects on the way young children behave.
In today’s convoluted world, there are multifarious agents which impact on children’ personality. In this regard, there is a controversial debate among individuals about the merits and demerits of watching TV for children’s behavior. Some people may hold the view that watching TV programs have positive impacts on children’s behavior, while, some others consider an opposing viewpoint. I firmly believe that the disadvantages of watching TV on children’s behavior outweigh its advantages. In the following, I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two pieces of evidence.
The first exquisite point to mention is that following TV programs containing violet and improper contents can negatively impact on children mind. It is obvious that children are receptive to whatever they watch and attempt to imitate it. As a result, watching unsuitable programs can motivate them to do these actions on own. Imitating these actions not only can pose a threat to their health but also negatively impacts on their social relationships. By way of illustration, consider my own experience as an example. When I was a primary student, I used to watch western movies which showed actors had troubles which others and fought to reach their goals. Moreover, the main character in these movies smoked professionally to seem more appealing. Therefore, watching these movies encouraged me to start smoking in those ages which damaged my lungs. Additionally, I used to apply their unsuitable phrases for speaking with my friends who gave rise to lose some of my friends.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that watching movies and TV programs can endanger family relationships. No one can neglect the fact that young people watching TV channels pay less attention to their environment. Therefore, they will less cooperate on the household chores and are less inclined to deal with family issues. Needless to say, a sedentary lifestyle is one of the most common troubles in modern families which threaten youth health both mentally and physically. Consequently, young children would be extremely lazier and less opts to follow parents’ rules. According to a recent study that has been conducted in the psychology faculty of Tehran University, researchers investigated the relation between the number of hours which young children watched TV, and their aggressive behavior against parents requires. The results revealed that the more children watch TV programs, the more they dismiss parents’ requisitions.
In brief, one can logically conclude that spending fewer hours watching TV and movies can benefit children’s behavior regarding children sustainability to imitate a celebrity’s actions and their less attention to their duties. However, there are other reasons and examples, challenging these reasons, not mentioned above. All in all, it is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound impacts of spending time for watching TV and movies on children’s morale.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5464362851 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1421871197 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555075593952 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2612982995 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2916666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157550778947 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497735167601 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440760047809 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100163295298 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205448132958 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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