Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child(5-10 years old)?
1.being helpful
2.Being honest
3.Being well organized
Since the dawn of civilization, people are more concerned about the efficiency of their children in school years. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among individuals about various values that parents and teachers should share with their young children. Some people may hold the view that being well-organized is the most critical and remarkable value to be shared, while, others take an opposite viewpoint. I strongly contend that sharing and developing the attribute of being well-organized is more important than other values like being helpful or being honest. In the following, I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two pieces of evidence.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that being well organized enables children to be successful and thriving in their future life. It is generally agreed that Children who are more organized have the opportunity to concentrate more on their studies. In addition, this hallmark paves the way for enhancing their performance and learning more knowledge. Therefore, no one can neglect the fact that being well organized can assist students to find more decent jobs and climb their carrier ladder more effectively. Take a personal experience as an example. When I was a student in school, I was a messy but intelligent pupil. Meanwhile, my friend Ali was more organized than me. Although we both had the same intelligent and effort for grasping our studies, being organized enabled him to make himself more prepare for the final test and acquire a better score than me. Consequently, since of his better marks in school, he could find a high paid job and make a fortune while I couldn’t. Had I learned to be more organized, I would have been more prosperous than now.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that being more organized opens doors to be happier. Needless to say that those who have learned to be more organized have more opportunity to find friends thanks to their appearance. Consequently, learning to be more organized not only help young children to enjoy their friends’ company but also positively impact on their expectations. According to a recent study that has been published In Time magazine, researchers of Tehran University devised an experiment for investigating effects of being well organized on the social communication. Scientists recognized two different kinds of organized and less organized individuals. The results show that those who are more organized seems to be more appealing to their friends and family members. To put in a different way, the more someone is organized, the more his relatives and friends apt to deepen his or her relationship with him or her which plays a significant role in his or her life.
In brief, one can logically draw the conclusion that being well organized would benefit students more than other characteristics in terms of fostering their efficiency or boosting their future status and assisting them to develop their circle of friends. However, there are other reasons and examples, challenging these reasons, not mentioned above. All in all, it is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound consequences of these various values on children morale.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2711.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19348659004 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92971009069 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515325670498 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1625874014 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.44 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.88 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206222124865 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653412497598 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641829607476 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145825436691 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654963231069 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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