Agreement or disagreement: For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in the school.
Recently, there has been a growing body of opinion in favor of how some main factors such as studying hard, being diligent as well as relating well to people can affect one's prosperity and opportunity in getting a decent job or becoming successful in a career. Anyway, world people opinions are divided on this issue. Some says nobody can get a decent job unless he or she tries hard and does great at school or university. Others say, no matter how much diligent someone was back in university, they just require to be able to relate well to other people at the office and have good interaction to reach success. However, as far as I am concerned I have confidence in this idea that both aspects of the topic including negative and positive ones, deserve to be assessed under sufficient thinking time and deliberation to reach the best result since the topic is still open to question. To evaluate that, no less than three conspicuous detailed reasons and concrete examples have been put below to uphold the explanation.
At the beginning, the most paramount factor of the topic involves in being hard worker. Needless to say, the more one attempts, the more successful he or she will certainly become. As it is shown in the history, all the scientists were hard worker ones who tried to reach their own goals. For instance: Einstein. No matter what level of proficiency one is already at, endeavoring to get the things done in a goal oriented way can certainly lead him or her to the result.
Another spectacular aspect of the topic, which seems to be significant enough to be take into consideration falls back on bringing hope to one's heart by working hard. Aside from leading to success, working hard will bring hope to one's heart so that if he or she becomes fail for the first time, he or she will try for the second or third time. Having hope and being constantly hopeful helps one better go through obstacles and barriers allowing him or her to think that it is going to be done. A number of researches have been conducted in this matter representing how being helpful can result in success in almost 95 percent of cases.
Unlike the two reasons above, the third one refers to relating well to people and its effects on working place. Keeping in touch with others is one of the most important factors in developing one's chance of becoming successful. Take a typical employee as an example who wants to try being more connected with his manager. No doubt, the more he tries, the more chance of success he gets. Therefore, this should be kept in mind that being connected with important ones can help one move impressively forward in his own career.
In the long run, although some drawbacks are associated with relating well to people especially significant ones because of becoming more exposed to everyone else, when all factors are contemplated the paramount factors of the subject carry the same weight. Therefore, from what have been discussed above the conclusion, which may be intertwined at the beginning of the discussion and thus become more persuasive may safely accentuate that the idea of considering both factors can make a great sense and is not fail as a sagacious statement..
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, third, thus, well, for instance, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2658.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77199281867 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59583049942 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522441651706 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1462021026 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.818181818 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3181818182 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198908948919 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624662163715 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520200617915 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110743565052 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441618431837 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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