Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves. Examples of altruism

Althought many young people argue weather to leave their parents house and start their inderpendent life , i think it is more advantageous to have an indepedant life from the begining of your life trip . I feel this way for the two main reasons , wich i will explore in the follozing essai .

First of all , starting your life without your parents will teach you how to handle your life and find in the difficult moments your way to equilibrium .My own experience is a compelling example of this . As when i was 18 years old i completed my bachelor program and i went to live in another city where i will continue my studies . i founded the first days really hard and i realized that my parents were doing huge effort to make comfortable and getting away from problems for that reason i was stuck in every time i face a difficult situation , but as long as my parents were too far i was forced to solve my problems by my own and after a period of time i felt that is not the same person anymore , i raised my self to be a stronger person . For this first reason i strongly believe its much better to be independent person .

Secondly , having an early periode of your life standing by yourself make you grow up much more faster and gives you many good qualities , For instance i have a cousin whou live in germany i visited him last year for holidays . He was 35 years old and he was still living with his parents m unfortently i have remarqued that he have a weak personality as he was totally uninendependant and cant do anything by him self , for exemple we went in a trip with his car and despite we are in his contry he has no cloue how to make reservation or where are the good places and at the time we face a small problem he just call his parents for help , the problem in this situation is that the parents will be anytime for you to help you but not all your life and it will come a time that they will need a pay back , wich mean they will need your help too. Accordingly i claims that independence creat a good caracteres and a strong personality .

in conclusion , there is no brainier that is better to be independent .First Independence will make you struggle the life issues and find always your equilibrium . Second with no doubt man can have a stronger personality because you never know how strong you are until strong is the only choice you have .

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, as for, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34467120181 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49727649105 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478458049887 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 155.819719946 48.9658058833 318% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 174.181818182 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0909090909 20.6045352989 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5454545455 5.45110844103 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.5376344086 831% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0624192577791 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290799558238 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256816352053 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0371706626939 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226090969922 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.78 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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