There is no shortage of debate weather the happiest time of humans life are in a Jung or in an old age, in my opinion i think we are more happy when we are young. I feel this way for the following reasons that i will explore in the following essay .
First of all, at the time people are young there is no much responsibilities and this is a great fact that make them more happy and relaxed, my experience in life is a compelling example of this. As i was a child, i was living in a big family, where i was encircle with my parents and brothers, my big problems at that time was to do my home works and succeed in school, when i go out to play the most important thing was not the time or the engagement you have but was how much fun you will have. As i grow up , responsibilities increase and with them comes naturally problems, the most of my time i am forced to hold my self to spend good times with friends, going out, having fun, even watching a movie or play video games at home because i have many priorities above that .
Secondly , i think when people are young simple things make them happy, however as they grow up they look for more complicated things as a method to find happiness. For instance, every time i meet my older brother i get excited about his way of life for example, he have a nice car, he lives in an urban city where people can find a lot of entertainment places and activities, he have nice girlfriend .Despite of those advantageous factors that can make me at this age very happy he is looking for another way to find happiness. For this reason i think happiness start to be a more complicated term as we grow up .
Base on the above discussion , i believe that for the less responsibility the young people have and for the simple things that defines happiness for them , young people are much more happy then the older ones .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.26912181303 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51111050826 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490084985836 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2841213262 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.444444444 100.406767564 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.2222222222 20.6045352989 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.2222222222 5.45110844103 279% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.5376344086 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0958566439377 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451959428174 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501294003747 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625131081768 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478909020437 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.08 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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